Guys...Mapfhhhhh ya...tadinya disini ada cerpen yg judulnya "Hati untuk Sang PEngelana" tapi skrg cerpen itu udah aku simpan di tempat yg "aman". Dan siap untuk diperdalam lagi demi "sesuatu yg besar." Wish me luck...
MAkasih semua... atas comment, masukan ataupun kritiknya. I do appreciate it.
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hmmm....
a writer? cool!!!
I never thought that someday u're gonna be a writer :) It's a great job since I love reading hehehe...
kenapa harus buat kalo kamu bisa beli (ah... It's just a reason cause I can not write something hehehe...)
But can I give my comments? (ofcourse I can :P) I think it's too long. It will be better if u make it shorter. cause it's a short story, isnt it? too many words sometimes makes us boring...
ur student
Mahbub Ulhaq
Hi, Mahbub, Thanks for visiting my blog :-)
Make it shorter? I'll think about it. Coz, You know, I just practice writing, and try to see how long is a short story in a newspaper. Mostly about 4-5 pages. Some are 4,5 pages.I'm a bit worry about the editor's editing, so it's gonna be shorter and shorter in the end. I think i prefer 4 pages. Not too short not too long, and we still have a space to develop the characters.
I put lots of efforts to learn how to write a story. There are some weaknesses, though. But my dream is writing something that doesn't make the readers feel bored. Well, it'll be a long long long journey for me. Thanks a lot for ur comment.
We're a little different here, I'm like "why should i buy a book if i can borrow them from somebody else..Hwahaha..." n Me, reading those books make me want to make one.
Anyway, One of the best students in LIA Bintaro don't like writing? I understand that. At least he speaks English well, doesn't he?
What about the content? Any other comment? thank u once again, c ya!!
This one of the best student has been losing his ability. dah lama bgt ga make english jadi ya gini, blepotan lagi hehehe...
the content?
hmmmm....
I have no ability to comment about the story. Im the one who loves criticizing :P (bener ga miss tulisannya?)
I've just read ur 3 short stories yet. Base on what I've read, gw suka sama keindahan kata2 yang dipake. itu majas kah namanya? gw kasih point penuh deh hehehe...
but secara keseluruhan, yah not bad lah. I can not say some words like great!! or cool!! coz that's what I feel about these 3 stories. sorry miss... someone who cant write anything gives u critic here :P
BNer tuh tulisannya. It happens to everyone kok. I often forget my vocabularies when i dont use them very often.
Yup, metafora. perumpamaan. Smoga aja aku bisa mencapai metafora yg indah, tapi juga bermakna dalam...(kapan ya) Phewww perlu latihan2 dan latihan. I'm not fully satiesfied with the stories either... Soal menulis cerita aku emang ktinggalan jaaauuhhh.
Penulis tuh biasanya udah mulai nulis minimal sejak SMA dan suka baca buku sejak kecil. I just really started to really like reading n writing...this past one year. At least that's all I can write during 2-month-autodidact learning of writing stories. Hopefully the next stories will be much better n better.
Let's not see who gives critics...but let's see what's in the critics? begitu bukan? Besides, kamu suka baca buku, kan? I'm sure i can rely on ur opinion.
Thanx a lot ya
Hey...
I wasnt trying to make u down. For the one who have just learnt to write some stories, these are awesome!! :)
just continue ur good work. Im waiting for the times when u are being an author cause I will be one of the people who's gonna buy ur masterpiece ;)
Hi,
I really really dont mind at all with the critics. I believe they can make me better and better :).
You know what? sabtu kmrn i met my favorite writer, helvy tiana rosa. And i plan to send the story to her... hopefully she had a time to give comments on it.
Read her blog... trust me. it's great. helvytr.multiply.com
c ya
Bagus tulisannya. Aku suka. Narasinya bagus. Salam kenal juga, Yun.
Hi mas Arie.... Makasih ya atas comment nya. Ikut komunitas sastra FLP nggak? Salam kenal juga ya
Ak gak ikut FLP...independen ajah. Bagus loh tulisan km. Btw...editor jg?
Makasih :-)
Iya, aku editor juga, tapi nggak di Publishing company kyk mas arie.
di cns junior, english magazine for kids.
Waaaa.. tulisan di blognya banyak bgt ya, gimana caranya nyempetin waktunya tuh? Oya... aku lagi mantain blog aku di multiply nih (pelangiyuyun.multiply.com) abis ternyata temen2 byk yg di multiply. MAs ari punya multiply?
penerbitnya namanya apa?
yaaaahh...gak rutin jg kok nulis blognya. Klo mood ajah. Ak editor buku, tabloid komputer. Grupnya majalah PC Media. Gak punya multiply. Punya FS gak?
oh... PC MEdia. aku ada fs, nyun2@yahoo.com. hehe..aku suka iseng tuh, nulis2 di buletin fs.
Permisi, my i put my litle coment 2 ur short story?
Hmm, nggak nyangka ya feelnya dapet banget, namun sayang terlalu berlama-lama dengan deskripsi, sebaiknya di perbanyak dialog (atau mungkin ini pilihan gaya penulisan saja ya?) Sah-sah saja sih, saya aja yang sok usil ngomentarin, hehehe, sorry ya! Tapi keren kok. tetap semangat nulis ya!! Dani FLP
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